After the eyeless dark

After the eyeless dark

of night I can perceive

a tree outside with bare

limbs raised in prayer

for spring and you beside

me with your lips like red

clouds at the promise

of dawn.

 

(Julian O’Dea)

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4 responses to this post.

  1. Posted by Roman Lance on July 11, 2017 at 1:10 pm

    Is this a continuation of your post “Lipstick”? Seems like it. If so, it’s a good expansion.

    Reply

    • Posted by Julian O'Dea on July 11, 2017 at 11:06 pm

      Sometimes a poetic idea can be used as a haiku, which is what the earlier poem was (strictly speaking it was perhaps a senryu because it had a human element.) Sometimes the same idea can be used in a normal poem.

      This newer one people seem to like, although I am concerned that it is really three metaphors presented as a poem.

      Reply

  2. Posted by fuzziewuzziebear on July 12, 2017 at 2:27 am

    From your poem, it reminds me that I don’t think that humans were meant to sleep alone. This seems to be a modern thing.

    Reply

    • Posted by Julian O'Dea on July 12, 2017 at 8:09 am

      It is interesting what people get from a poem. I have slightly rewritten this one now and will send it off for possible publication.

      Reply

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