The young are the immortal

The young are the immortal

who deign to walk among us

feted by the cosmos

and worshipped by all.

 

See the yellow sun

and the velvet night

colour the tresses

of their hair,

while the wind caresses

their skin with gentle care,

and the stars make sapphires

of their eyes.

 

Daylight kisses them madly

and will never let them sadly

join the shades below.

Every new dawn

brings warm

assurance they shall never die.

 

(Julian O’Dea)

(A revision after comments from Timothy Train and Dulci Jubilo)

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10 responses to this post.

  1. A little ripper. 🙂

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  2. Posted by Zeta on June 8, 2016 at 7:39 am

    Youth is wasted on the young.

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  3. I really enjoyed your poem “It is not a Vison” which was published in the latest Creatix online managing. I’ve been reading a few of your poems on this site and find them refreshing and thought provoking especially “The young are the immortal”. You strip them down simply and the intent is inescapable. Thank you.

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  4. I like the play of light and dark and the use of “shades” in these lines: “Daylight kisses them madly/and will never let them sadly/ join the shades below.” Brings to mind Dante. Also the warmth of a new dawn assuring them of their immortality is rather ironic.

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  5. Ha, the lines I mentioned are the lines you changed. Much improved.

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  6. Sadly is better than shadily and shades is better than Shadily.

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